preps
why must i be here
here with these people
they think they're better
than everyone they see
they're just a bunch of
prissy bitches
they're no good to anyone
shit stain on society
but yet everyone
wants to be like them
wants to walk, talk
and act like them
i hate them all
i cant stand them
they look down on me
because im not stuck up
like them at all
i dont care thought
i just wish they knew
knew who they were
i wish they knew
how stuck up they are
i wish i could get away from them
but they surround me
wherever i go they're there
i just want to get away
i just want to smack one
right in the fucking face
here with these people
they think they're better
than everyone they see
they're just a bunch of
prissy bitches
they're no good to anyone
shit stain on society
but yet everyone
wants to be like them
wants to walk, talk
and act like them
i hate them all
i cant stand them
they look down on me
because im not stuck up
like them at all
i dont care thought
i just wish they knew
knew who they were
i wish they knew
how stuck up they are
i wish i could get away from them
but they surround me
wherever i go they're there
i just want to get away
i just want to smack one
right in the fucking face
posted by simmons at 10:15 PM
2 Comments:
Hey, I don't wanna be a downer, but I've gotta point something out... it's the spelling! I can't read this piece without being distracted by it - if you're gonna use off-spelling in a poem, it has to give more/alternative meaning to the lines.
In this case, I don't see the misuse of 'their' doing that. You've got 'they're' and 'their' all fucked up here and it's warping me.
'Their': as in, "Their peice of shit car is blocking our driveway." or, "Their perfect clothes and $100 hair-doos don't mean a fuckin' thing to me."
vs.
'They're': as in *...they are...*,"They're a bunch of useless, soul-sucking motherfuckers who don't give a fuck for anything but themselves." or, "I tried to warn them and tell 'em what was gonna go down, but they're a hard-headed bunch of bastards and they were determined to keep on with their plans."
Anyways, just trying to be constructive. I'm sure you'd rather hear something about the content of the poems, but it's hard to focus on that when the poem itself seems off (because of that spelling!).
sorry i didnt notice. i fixed that one just for you.
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